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some people think that government should take care of diet of all individuals of country , others think that people should themselves take care of diet and health, discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #government #care #diet #individuals #country #health
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People have differing views regarding
health
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 care. According to some, it is
sole responsibility
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the sole responsibility
 of
people
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the people
 themselves,
however
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, others disagree and opine that
government
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 should do some efforts toward it. In my opinion,
government
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 as well as individuals
have
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has
role
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a role
 to play Some opine that
government
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 should make sure that all the individuals of
nation
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a nation
the nation
nations
 are disease free. If dwellers of
nation
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the nation
a nation
nations
 are fit and
healthy
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healthy, then
then
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 eventually nation would be more prosperous
;
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;
therefore
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,
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govenment
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the government
government
 being the governing body should ensure the good
health
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 of its citizens. People
also
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 hold
this
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 opinion owing to the fact that they pay
tax
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taxes
.
Also
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, good
health
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hold
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holds
 utmost significance in people's life as without it a person cannot cherish other facilities provided by
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government
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the government
.
This
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 is a reason that they want their tax to be allocated in highly imperative sector, which is
health
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 sector To some it may feel counterintuitive, and they contend that some of the
health
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 problems
such
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 as drug addiction are created by individuals
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. So, there is no viable reason to utilize funds on
such
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 people. Even if
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govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
provide
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provides
 them aid, it is highly probable that they may again involve in
health
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detriorating
become worse or disintegrate
deteriorating
 addictions. On the top of
this
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, it is not feasible for
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government
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the government
 to take care of
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diet
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the diet
 of all citizens. Even though,
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govenment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 may aware them about healthy eating, but it is
individuals
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the individuals
themelves
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
 who have to incorporate healthy items in their
diet
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. In my opinion, workable approach is the
cumilative
increasing by successive addition
cumulative
 efforts of both
government
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 and individuals.
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govenment
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Government
Govenment
 should ensure the quality of food which is being distributed to retailers throughout the country by various companies.
In addition
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 to it
,
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,
government
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sponsered
assume sponsorship of
sponsored
 awareness campaign about healthy eating
habbits
an established custom
habits
 could assist people in
embracing balanced
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the embracing balanced diet
diet
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. Apart from
this
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, people may themselves make efforts to reduce the intake of junk and toxic food items and follow
healthy
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a healthy diet plan
diet
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 plan. In conclusion, it seems that to make individuals healthy, determined efforts by both people and
government
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 are required

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