Many people like to wear fashionable clothes.What do you think is the case? Is this good or a bad thing?

With the exposure that people get through through
internet
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the internet
and technology about almost every field of life, it is impossible to ignore the fact that we are indeed living in a world of
fashion
. So today everyone
have
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has
their own
fashion
statements and style icons. People tend to wear fashionable clothes to portray themselves as updated in the world of
fashion
. In my
opinion it
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opinion, it
is good or even better to dress according to the occasion. If we have a good
fashion
sense it will boost our confidence which will inevitably be reflected in our words and manner.
For instance
, while attending a wedding party wearing a classy and unique piece by a reputed stylist would make you a
showstopper
an act so striking or impressive that the show must be delayed until the audience quiets down
show-stopper
show stopper
and
centre
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the centre
of attraction, which will in turn improve your confidence level.
However I
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However, I
do not suggest wearing a modern or trendy outfit in a traditional set up
such
as in religious occasions (visiting a temple or a church etc.). Yet, the real question as to what we should wear
depend
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depends
on our mentality. In my perspective,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
feel more comfortable in modern or fashionable attire rather than traditional ones. When
fashion
trends keep changing people
adopt
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
to it in order to be updated.
Still I
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Still, I
think it is unsuitable to wear a revealing or exposing to a social occasion because I feel that it would be embarrassing to us if someone
points out
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points this out
this
.
Also
, it would reduce our confidence. So it is better to make sure that we wear clothes that are comfortable for us. Changes
comes
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come
at a price. Fashionable clothes are mostly expensive and so it is better not to spend much on them. It is good if we can stick to our financial status while purchasing our clothes. So to
summarise I
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summarise, I
think it is good to wear fashionable clothes in order to showcase our
fashion
statement in
this
modern dynamic world.

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