IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. *Discuss both sides and give your opinion.*

#people #road #safety #limits #vehicles #*discuss
The major mode of transportation globally is the
road
 and its havoc is rampant.
Consequently
, some believe that minimising the optimum speed limits is the most appropriate way to curb accidents on the highway while others think there are other suitable ways to do
this
. In my opinion, I believe that
although
 introducing speed breaker in cars is a good way out, but other approaches
such
 as regular eye checks and fixing of bad roads will help reduce the menace. On the one hand, some people opine that the introduction of a speed limit will assist in reducing the mishaps on the roads.
In other words
, since the vehicle cannot move beyond recommended kilometre per hour, the driver is able to control acceleration and the application of the breaks will be prompt.
Moreover
, driving within a specific moving rate gives the driver the ability to manoeuvre controllably in case of unforeseen interception by other
road
 users, eventually, averting
road
 accidents.
For instance
, the interstate transporting companies in Nigeria have introduced
this
 into their vehicles and
as a result
, the occurrence of these ugly events has reduced drastically.
On the other hand
, others think there are more appropriate approaches and I stand with
this
.
Firstly
, regular visit to the ophthalmologist will help correct eye defects and inadvertently minimize collisions
such
 as running into another vehicle or impediments ahead.
Secondly
, fixing of potholes and bad spots.
That is
 to say when the ways are void of all these, the journey will be itch-free and there would not be a need for users to want to avoid them thereby no result of somersaulting while trying to dodge them.
For example
, the Federal
Road
 Safety Corps in Nigeria reported that 65% of RTAs (
road
 traffic accidents) occur when drivers try to dodge potholes. In conclusion, despite the varying views on how to keep the roads safe, I am of the opinion that regular eye checks and good roads are top notches in mitigating
this
 hurdle.
Submitted by Mabel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: