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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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A lot of poor people have no roof over their heads and it is argued that providing finance for them is the appropriate way to aid them. In my opinion, giving
money
 to homeless people is only a temporary solution so authorities should think about better plans. When the poor are given
money
, they can utilise it for their daily needs
such
 as buying foods. But, food alone cannot fulfil a person in their daily life since a lot of other areas
such
 as paying rent, children's
education
 are to be considered and who will assist them every time for these is a challenging question and
hence
 it
can not
can not
cannot
 be said that giving
money
 is the best solution to help the poor. Apart from
this
, if the impoverished ones get
money
 every time from rich people or the
government
, they may expect help in the form of finance every time which can make them lazy and they will no longer take part in the progress of the nation by not working hard.
Therefore
, the best way to uplift the living standards of destitute people is by providing them with free
education
 and economic-based reservations in jobs.
This
 strategic planning is adopted by the India
government
 that provides free
education
 for those who are below the poverty line until degree level and 10% vacancy in
government
 jobs for
such
 people.
As a result
, many poor people now can take care of their families without financial assistance from the
government
 which is only temporary relief. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that assisting the poor by giving them
money
 cannot be considered as a perfect method. The best way to raise their living standard is by governments helping them to attain good
education
 and jobs. The

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