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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The average quality of human
health
 is going to be decreased in coming time than at present. I agree to a great extent that people's
health
 will be affected in near times.
Moreover
, they are more likely to be
ailed
related by common characteristics or ancestry
allied
 with serious diseases. Due to decline in
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
 for morning and evening walks, and heavy exercises, a large chunk of our society is having severe
health
 issues.
This
 habit is taking them toward the
health
 problems, which are not
dignosed
determine or distinguish the nature of a problem or an illness through a diagnostic analysis
diagnosed
 until
last stage
Suggestion
the last stage
. Ergo, resulting in low quality
health
 as well as minimizing average age of
population
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the population
 for
future
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the future
.
In addition
 to
this
, increased number of sitting jobs are one of the factors which is
adding
Suggestion
added
 to low quality standard
health
. For an example, earlier there were
plethora
Suggestion
a plethora
 of field jobs which kept
human
Suggestion
the human body
body
 in movement every time, resulting in healthy lifestyle. That
body
 movement is now left with fingers running over keyboards and mobile screens. On the flip side, some individuals are aware of problems surfacing in the human
body
. They have had already changed their diet to diminish the negative effect on healthy living. To sum up, exercising is must for healthy
body
, along with proper diet.
Otherwise
, average human
health
 will be lowered in future than present.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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