The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is a confusing question to decide whether the average standard of people's
health
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is decreasing or not. As far as I am concerned, our modern world lifestyle is not helping anyone with their help. In
this
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essay, I intend to discuss the reasons behind our unhealthy lifestyles along with some possible
soloutions
a homogeneous mixture of two or more substances; frequently (but not necessarily) a liquid solution
solutions
solution
to it. The overall
health
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of people is decreasing
as a result
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of the 21st century lifestyles we have adapted. The busy
lives we
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lives, we
have built for
our selves
reflexive form of "us"
ourselves
is no shock to the reason behind poor
health
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.
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, with the office jobs that many people have and the long days that they sit
infront
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in front
of a computer or screen there is no time to walk or go to the gym. In
the older
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the old
days, many people had manual jobs or even jobs that involved walking around which would have helped with their
health
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if not increased it. In todays society, most of the work is done by computers, robots or machines which will
then
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makes
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make
us in charge of operating it by sitting down in an office or factory sometimes with even no sunlight. It is
also
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worth mentioning that scientist
have come
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has come
to new findings on the food that will help us maintain a healthy and balanced lifestyle. They are providing us with the knowledge on how to eat and be more healthy.
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, many unhealthy products are being advertised and brought into the supermarkets which contain a high amount of
addetives
something added to enhance food or gasoline or paint or medicine
additives
and
preservetives
tending or having the power to preserve
preservatives
. As a conclusion, having the least amount of time to get fresh air, sunlight and
excersice
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
is not helping
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are not helping
the
health
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and well being of our society. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
with the way we
our
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are
leading our lives,
however
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healthy we
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healthy, we
are encouraged to eat, we will not maintain a healthy body and the average
standerd
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
standard
standards
will fall as the years pass by.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Standard of health
  • 2. Average
  • 3. Lower
  • 4. Future
  • 5. Aging population
  • 6. Chronic diseases
  • 7. Sedentary lifestyle
  • 8. Lack of exercise
  • 9. Poor dietary habits
  • 10. Environmental pollution
  • 11. Technological advancements
  • 12. Impact on health
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