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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbours. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly • explain how this is affecting you and your neighbours • suggest what should be done about the problem Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to give some
suggestion
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 on our
garbage
collection
 system. On the whole, our neighbourhood is always safe and comfortable, with everything well organized
especially
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, especially
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 the rubbish
collection
 system. The recycled
garbage
 was usually collected
on
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every Wednesday morning,
while
 organic
garbage
 and others on Thursdays. What we
need
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needed
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 to do was only
putting
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put
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 the
garbage
 can in front of our house.
However
, recently the
garbage
collection
 in my local area did not work properly. We sometimes found our
garbage
 cans still full on
thursday
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Thursday
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 nights, with nobody collecting them.
Then
 we had to wait for
collection
 maybe
on
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next week.
Garbage
, especially the kitchen disposal, would decay quickly
in
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on
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 hot
sommer
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summer
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 days, emitting
odor
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odour
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 to our living environment, insects
such
 as flies breed drastically making things even worse.
This
 will
apparantly
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apparently
 affect our normal life, nobody wants a living environment surrounded by rubbish and bad
odor
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odour
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. So is it possible for you to collect the rubbish on time, better
collecting
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to collect it
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 twice a week when the
temprature
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temperature
 is relatively high. We would appreciate
for
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that. Thank you, I am looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you.
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Logical Structure
Enhance the logical flow by clearly organizing each point in separate paragraphs. Begin by stating the problem, followed by the effects, and end with the solution in distinct sections.
Complete Response
Ensure to address all parts of the task thoroughly. The letter touches on all required points, but more detailed explanations and examples could strengthen the response.
Suitable Writing Tone
The letter uses an appropriate and respectful tone throughout, which is suitable for addressing a local council.
Greeting and Closing
The letter begins and concludes politely, adhering to formal letter conventions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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