Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles others think there are other better ways . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Although
, it is thought by some individuals that criminal activities is
as a result
of societal influence and penury,
others
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others, however
however
, believe its an outcome of inherent traits. In my point of view, I opine that lack of money and societal influence are the determining factors in one's indulging in crime. On the one hand, some group of people suggested that person's involvement in unlawful acts
is
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agrees as a result of interference from social groups such as peer group and I
is as a result of interference from social groups such as peer group and I agree
as a result
of interference from social groups
such
as peer group and I agree
.
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.
This
is because, if an individual interacts with friends who take part in these acts, they are bound to join the
bad
an unofficial association of people or groups
band
wagon in
other
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
not to feel left out
in
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of
the group.
In addition
,
pennilessness
is
also
a factor to be taken into account. Considering the economic situation across the globe, and the high rate of
unemployment which
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unemployment, which
has left a large proportion of people jobless, many individuals end up engaging in criminal act so as to meet up with their daily requirements. A research carried out by the Nigerian prisons authority showed that, 80% of the inmates sites lack of finance as their major reason for committing crime.
On the other hand
, another school of thought
recommend
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recommends
that illegal acts are borne out of an individual’s genetic make-up.
In other words
, since the a child’s genetic structure is a combination of traits from both parents, if any of the parents partakes in
such
illegitimate act there is about 99.9% possibility that their offspring will exhibit
such
attributes because, it is already, embedded in congenital traits.
For instance
, investigation into the life of Dereck Brew, a famous serial killer in New Zealand revealed that his father during his youthful age killed three of his ex-girlfriends,
hence
his ability to carry out
such
acts with feeling any iota of regret. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I believe that a
people's
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person's
immediate environment and
poor financial state
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the poor financial state
contributes greatly to a
persons
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person's
violation of the law.
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