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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town hall rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every museums and historical buildings reflect the traditional
culture
 about the region. Money should be spent on design new public buildings like museums rather than recreating the old ones. I disagree with
this
 statement to
large extent
Suggestion
a large extent
, but to some extent I agree.
To begin
 with the reasons of recreating the old buildings. The
first
 and the foremost is ancient buildings brings a unique image of past
culture
.
Moreover
, historical spots are the collection of moral and traditional
culture
 which gives traditional ethnics in old buildings. So, renovating the existing buildings is very crucial because
its
the thing named or in question
it
give
Suggestion
gives
 awareness about past centuries famous and popular activities.
In addition
 to
this
, ancient building
designs
Suggestion
design
 creativity is very unique and very attractive which attract more visitors or travellers. Old museums bring some collection of old
culture
 things which is very little in recent century. People can easily attract with these ancient things because
this
 related to their religion and people
also
 believe in ancient things as well as gives respect regarding to their traditional and moral galleries. People can easily aware with their nation's
history
 with the help of ancient museums.
For instance
, Tajmahal is very popular historical building and very attractive as well as provide a true love story in past
culture
.
On the other hand
, in some
situation creating
Accept comma addition
situation, creating
 a new building is very important because nowadays adopt
western
a film about life in the western United States during the period of exploration and development
Western
culture
 and attract with western
culture
. So, they
also
 want to see some modern building.
Therefore
, creating a new building is
also
 attracting some visitors and
also
 create some
history
 for a new generation. To conclude, recreating the ancient building is very vital because its provide some beneficial information about the
history
 and everyone right to know about the past
history
 as well as creating a new architect provide some latest collection about the
culture
 and advancement.

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