People tend to believe that all young adults should undertake a period of unpaid work for the good of the community. Do you agree or disagree?

The youth of today are generally considered to lack social knowledge and experience which are of crucial importance in their future development. To solve
this
problem, some
people
suggest that they should undertake a period of voluntary
work
in the local
community
. Personally, I think its pros far outweigh the cons. Undoubtedly, it can be a win-win approach –
that is
, it will benefit both the young and the
community
enormously if young students and employees do a certain period of unpaid
work
. By helping the elderly, the sick and the disabled directly or participating in charitable activities like raising funds or offering free consultation, young
people
will certainly gain and accumulate some valuable first-hand experience and know more about
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society.
Moreover
, young
people
with
such
experiences are more likely to become the most motivated ones in academic study or at
work
, and eventually become responsible citizens of the society. As far as the
community
is concerned, it will definitely become better with so many zealous young volunteers who are ready to help.
However
, there may be some disadvantages if the young provide free
service
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helping
people
in need.
For example
, it may conflict with their normal study or
work
if not arranged well.
Then
the result may be not as desirable as what is expected. But I think
this
sort of problem can be easily taken care of by meticulous planning by the authorities.
To conclude
,
competitiveness
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of modern life and
influence
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of global culture have isolated children from
neighbourhood
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. So,
such
a step would be very beneficial to make today’s children feel part of the
community
.
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