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Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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According to some person,
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the primary mode
 to be happy in life is to have more
money
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. In
this
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 world, there are things we can buy with paying
money
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 but, at the same time, there are things that we will never be able to get thought we are a millionaire. We can make our self-happy if we have a lot of
money
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 because with
money
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, we can easily purchase things what we want to like an expensive car branded clothes and much more and with enough
money
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 we can give our children and our life partner a good lifestyle or
fulfill
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fulfil
 their needs.
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, if you have more
money
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 you can
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 support your family if in case of medical emergency life expensive surgery or any other illness so you can easily afford
this
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 expense. On the other hands, we can make
our-self
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you
yourself
ourselves
 happy without
money
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 and the things that we never buy with
money
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that is
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 the love of your parents your kids. My parents were not
to
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too
 rich when I was a kid, they can afford our basic needs. I desire to get toys and pretty dresses like my other friends had but my parents did not afford to buy them. I was disappointed at that
time but
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time, but
 my parents bought me up with unlimited love and care they become my best friend to listen to me and when I was in trouble, they helped me.
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, my childhood was happy and I grew up having a positive way of thinking
instead
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 of complaining about the things my parents could not buy for me. In conclusion with my experience, Happiness always depends on our mindset and it is always subjective to change if the amount of
money
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 is considered a lot or
little
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a little
. By focusing on what we have on our hands now and drive to achieve what we want to gain we can always be happy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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