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Most societies has its homeless people. Some people think that the best way to help them is to give them money. To what extent do you agree?

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A section of
society
 asserts that homeless people must be given financial help. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 partially as a myopic solution because people without any shelter of their own should be encouraged for education or their skills should be enhanced to help them settle in long term.
To begin
 with, people who don't have any place to stay are very unfortunate and it is the duty of the community to extend their helping hand to make them available what they are deprived of. Any kind of financial help is always appreciated
hence
 the near term needs are fulfilled. Clothes, food and shelter are the basic necessities of any human being for survival.
For example
, many charitable organisations raise money to help
such
 people.
Nevertheless
, from an enlightened standpoint, government and charitable organisations should
also
 focus more on the strategic solution of
this
 problem. They need to be provided with education and followed by other professional skills which will eventually make them self sufficient and not dependent on any kind of donations.
For example
, governments should open up training centres which would emphasise on building the relevant skills which the homeless people can learn. These training facilities should provide shelter, food and relevant training which will help these people overcome the fear and be confident that they can earn and will be respected in the
society
.
Therefore
, by the government's planning and execution of different schemes can help anybody to again earn for themselves and
also
 gain respect. In conclusion, to deal with
this
 problem of the
society
 where some people have no access to the house, creating a proper plan and right execution of
such
 plans can reduce or remove the problem entirely from the
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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