People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than the previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are many educated

women

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at home in order to look after their children

as well as

family and consider

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this

is

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their responsibility.

However

, others, argue that they should be paid for their hard work. I, personally, believe that

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is an appropriate initiative

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that needs to be implemented for the betterment of the

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status. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that housewives,

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sacrifice their prosperous career ladder for the betterment of the family.

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, in several families,

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a female

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partner cannot

be continued

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her job once they get married as they are forced to take care

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of family

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affaires

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affairs

rather than

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for a job.

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, if they

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to work, they may be secured the highest position in their career.

Apart from

this

, they

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encounter a lot of emotional issues when they are unable to

employable

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, granting a pension,

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therefore

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, housewives can be

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recognised

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of

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their hard work and

this

surely enhances the morale of the

women

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a great

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. Yet, another point is taken into account is that

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by

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providing

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assistance makes them financially independent, and they can afford a certain amount of expenses without depending

anyone

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on anyone

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in the family. Not only will

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make them happy, but they think that their contributions towards family

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will be

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recognized among others as well.

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,

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society should understand that

women

in the family play multiple roles same time; mother, teacher,

care giver

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, cleaner, and so on. Having facilitated a regular income,

women

contribute even more

for

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the welfare of the entire family. By way of conclusion, there are some disagreements regarding allowing housewives to secure a monthly pension for their services in the family. In my opinion, I strongly support

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policy since

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uplifts

women

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society. It is predicted that

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new development be implemented in the near future.