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Some people think that cheap air flight gives ordinary people more freedom. However, others think the cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The debate over cheap
air
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 flight has persisted for decades in modern society. Some
people
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 argue that a low-priced
air
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 ticket boosts human life,
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 others believe that it should be limited because of making pollution and other issues.
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 public opinion is divided, both views will be discussed in the following essay. On the one hand, the main idea is that budget flights democratise mobility. Cheap
air
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 travel gives
people
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 choices to select a transportation option during the same journey.
Traveling
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Travelling
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 by aircraft saves more time than other transportation methods, especially long-distance journeys.
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, based on an affordable ticket, humans can arrive in the far country. It attracts a large number of tourists to faraway areas, which stimulates
globalization
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globalisation
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 and local economies. In education,
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, graduate students can increase the frequency of attending an international conference. In the social field,
people
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 who need to leave their hometown to work in other countries can go home and see their family more often.
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, a cheap
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 flight causes a great deal of problems. Aircraft consume a lot of fossil fuel and produce greenhouse gases.
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, it
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 worsens the
air
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 quality around airports through ultrafine particles. When
people
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 prefer
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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instead
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 of railways or buses, it aggravates the greenhouse effect.
Furthermore
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, the area near an airport becomes
more noisy
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noisier
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 when a plane is taking off and landing.
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, inhabitants might be disturbed at night, which brings negative influences on their sleep and learning. Admittedly, the low-priced
air
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 flight results in many drawbacks. Yet these pollution issues can be solved through advanced technology. I believe the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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, I firmly believe that it is not necessary to ban cheap
air
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 flights.

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structure
Plan a cold line in the intro: say what views you will talk about and what is your view.
language
Make each idea clear with short and simple sentences. Do not use long, hard lines.
lexical
Use only common words. Avoid hard or rare words so your message is easy to read.
content
Give one or two good examples that connect to the idea and say how they help your point.
coherence
Use easy links like also, but, so, because, or, however to help flow.
conclusion
Finish with a clear view that matches the start and is explained by the evidence.
structure
The text has a clear plan with an intro, body, and ending.
content
The essay shows both sides and a clear own view.
language
Link words help the flow from idea to idea.
conclusion
The ending restates the view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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