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The best way to improve health is to do regular exercise. To what extent do you agree.

#health #exercise
It has been said that the most effective way to improve health and fitness is through daily
exercise
. While I agree with
this
 notion to a certain degree, in my opinion, having a well balanced
diet
 is just as important. Physical activity is undoubtedly crucial for a healthy lifestyle and has numerous benefits. It not only helps in keeping
ones
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one's
 weight within the required
range but
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range, but
 it
also
 aids in the prevention of diseases involving the cardiovascular system, high blood pressure and diabetes just to name a few.
In addition
 to
this
,
exercise
 has been known to release certain hormones called
endorphins which
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endorphins, which
 decrease the levels of mental stress and elevate the mood.
However
, regular
exercise
 alone cannot lead to a person having a disease free life. Having a healthy
diet
 is highly beneficial and is a requirement of a healthy lifestyle.
For instance
, with the rise in popularity of fast food and ready made meals, more and more adults are suffering from problems like high cholesterol and obesity. Regular intake of a
diet
 that contains the required amount of calories and
vitamines
any of a group of organic substances essential in small quantities to normal metabolism
vitamins
 as well as minerals plays a
pivatol
being of crucial importance
pivotal
 role in maintaining ones physical health. To conclude, daily
exercise
 as well a well balanced
diet
 are both factors which contribute equally in having a
healthly
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
 life and should not be ignored if one wants to
aviod
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
 serious ailments.
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