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More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to past. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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In today’s contemporary world, an increasing number of people, especially the younger population, now prefer to stay on their own. I believe
this
 to be a negative development which may have adverse consequences
such
 as the person going into depression and the declining interaction with the society.
To begin
 with, living alone can sometimes lead to depression.
In other words
, whenever a person is
into
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in
 a lot of stress or facing some extreme situations in his life and he has no one around to talk to,
then
this
 loneliness can have
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
detrimental effects
 on
person’s
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a person’s
 mental & physical well being. For, instance, a recent survey by Medical Council of India states that, over 40% of people in
age group
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the age group
 of 25-40 years, staying alone are prone to increasing stress level and face health issues. To explain
further
, people living
individually often
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individually, often
 feel alienated from the society.
Such
 people are often regarded as introvert because they do not generally interact with people around them. Due to
this
 reason,
such
 people do not have friends or they fail to strike a chord with their colleagues or neighbours.
Moreover
, they often distance themselves from their family and relatives and are so accustomed to living alone that they do not communicate with anyone in the society. In conclusion, the recent
phenomenons
any state or process known through the senses rather than by intuition or reasoning
phenomena
phenomenon
 of living alone, especially amongst the millennial is proving to be highly negative for mankind wherein
this
 affects the health of an individual and
also
 results in minimal interaction with other inhabitants. The onus is on the entire mankind to arrest
this
 growing phenomenon & discourage
individually
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individuals
 living culture.

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