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As countries have developed there has been a trend towards smaller family sizes. Why does this happen? How does this affect society?

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In
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 contemporary era, most of the families are getting smaller and smaller, which tends to the small nuclear family. There are many reasons for
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 phenomenon, which will be discussed in the following paragraphs with relevant examples. The
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 and foremost, rising cost of living compelled the people to shrink the size of
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the family
. In cosmopolitan cities, the rates of accommodations are extremely expensive,
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, large families may face more financial issues.
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 is a vital reason why strength of members is
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reduced
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, nowadays, most of the parents are working,
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, they tend to have small the family. With the hectic schedule; they merely have a time for children, so, families spend their leisure time with children more effectively and give proper care and education. For an instance, a recent survey conducted by an eminent economist in Oxford university that in
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 modern era, 70% of families prefer to have only 1 kid and the rate of nuclear families are increasing day by day. There are numerous positive and negative effects to the society. The primary positive effect is that
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 help the countries to balance the
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population, which
 obviously provide benefits to decline the poverty line.
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, the negative effect is that it would lack the working force in the
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 decades, because there will be fewer young people in the workforce.
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 would substantially change the economy of the country. To sum up, there is an evident trend in countries that the family size is inclined.
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, it has both benefits and drawbacks on a society.

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