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With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The increase in population has put a stress on existing resources of oil and gas. Due to
this
, some argue that undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up for accessing more resources. In
this
 write up, I will present to what extent I concur with the aforementioned thought and express my reservations about the same. The world population is close to 7 billion and growing at a very fast rate.
In addition
 to
this
, even in countries where population explosion has moderated, the demand for energy shows no signs of reduction. Ironically, in certain advanced countries the consumption of non-renewable sources has only gone up due to the lifestyle changes over the decades.
On the other hand
, developing economies with demographic surpluses are deficient in basic infrastructure
such
 as electricity, transportation and cooking gas amongst others. In
such
 a scenario, to provide for necessities of the growing populace, nations have to undertake explorations in areas
such
 as polar regions of the Arctic and Antarctic, sea beds, Equatorial Forests, which have so far been less discovered.
This
 will reduce the strain on current resources which are already dwindling and might soon cease to exist. One must
also
,
however
, keep in mind that
such
 rapacious exploitation of nature will only add to the problem of global warming and climate change. It's essential that
instead
 of relying on traditional sources like fossil fuels, humanity should increasingly use cleaner technologies
such
 as Solar power or Wind. Ecosystems
such
 as Boreal Forests, Polar areas and others are the key to maintain the ecological balance of
this
 planet. To disturb their natural ecosystems for fossil explorations would lead to their collapse which could be catastrophic. Scientists have repeatedly pointed out that irreversible damages would be caused if keystone species
such
 as bees go extinct. To conclude,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think it will be beneficial if we try to diversify our energy basket with renewable sources to cope up for the lack of energy resources and only after we have exhausted other options should we try to explore and exploit the undiscovered areas of the world.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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