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Band 6

Write a letter when you have to apply for a position as a software developer

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Dear Sir, I am writing to express my interest in the position of
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“Software Developer” in your esteemed organization. It would be my privilege to be a member of “Zudio Software.” I have been employed as a “Data
Analyist
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Analyst
” in the IT Technicians, Toronto, for the past 10 years. During my job time, I handled various research projects about coding-decoding and app developments , in which I reflected great success for the company. Despite
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, I launched a popular app named
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“Prime Book Reading” that received
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 rating from 5 through beta testing.
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 app provides distinctive features: •Artificial
intelligence generated
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 answers. •Collaborative reading of books with real people. •
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 search with mother language. Beyond
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, I am flexible
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 communicate in several dialects
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are Hindi, English, German, and French.
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, I got various rewards for problem-solving skills, leadership qualities and many more.
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 the end, I would really appreciate
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 you give me
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 opportunity to explore more insights
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 technological innovation with your guidance. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Sarah

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Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to use a consistent format for listing features. Consider bullet points or a numbered list for clarity.
Task Achievement
Try to ensure that your past job title (Data Analyst) is spelled correctly.
Task Achievement
The introduction effectively states the purpose of the letter and shows enthusiasm for the position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter has a clear closing that shows politeness and professionalism.
Coherence and Cohesion
The paragraphing is well organized with each paragraph focusing on a single aspect of your experience or skills.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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