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Technology is becoming increasingly prevalent in the world today. Given time, technology will completely replace the teacher in the classroom. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today's world, the use of
technology
is
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has been
 ever-increasing. Even in
classrooms
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classrooms, technology
technology
 can be commonly seen. It is disagreed that
technology
 will completely replace the
teacher
 in the
classroom
.
Analyzing
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Analysing
 both the inability of a
technology
-driven
teacher
 to discipline students in a
classroom
 as well as
this
 robotic
teacher
's hindrance to a
students
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student's
student
 learning process will show
this
.
Firstly
, a
teacher
 powered by artificial intelligence would have little to no control over its students.
For example
, it is commonly understood that children require the watchful eye of a
teacher
 to ensure that they are indeed completing their class work and not fooling around during class time.
Unfortunately
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Unfortunately, this
this
 is something that a robotic
teacher
 simply cannot provide.
Thus
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Thus, this
this
make
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makes
 it clear why
technology
 will never completely replace the
teacher
 in the
classroom
.
Secondly
, a robotic
teacher
 would disrupt a student's learning process and in effect slow a student's ability to absorb information from lessons.
For instance
, kids require motivation to be taught effectively.
Such
 is a quality human
process but
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process, but
technology
 driven instructor do not. From
this
 it becomes quite evident that robotic instructors will never take the place of real teachers in a
classroom
 . In summary, a robotic
teacher
 lacks the discipline needed to instruct students properly and actually operates to retard a student's ability to learn new information.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 is clear why the idea of having a class run entirely by a machine cannot be supported. After
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
this
 subject, it is predicted that the negative aspects of the debate over computerized teaching will forever be stronger than the positive ones and because of
this
computers
Suggestion
computer
 will never replace teachers.
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