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Nowadays, people are spending increasingly large amounts of money on their marriage parties. Many people feel large and expensive weddings cause problems for the bride and groom. Do you agree? Use personal examples in your response.

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Weddings, undoubtedly, are becoming more lavish day by day. Some believe
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 extravaganza cause a financial burden and unnecessary stress on the
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 couples and I completely agree with
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, in order to afford grand weddings, new couples and their families normally undertake big loans or use their long
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 savings.
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 is because by doing so, they feel integrated in their society and they will not carry the stigma of being poor or stingy.
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, in India, when girls are married, their parents use all the money that they have been saving for years into their big day. Had they done a small marriage, depending on their affordability, that money could have been used in a more useful and productive way.
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, large parties come with enormous stressful moments. In an aim to have everything perfectly set up in a short span of
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 brides and grooms do not enjoy these days as much as they should have been. To exemplify, new couples trying to imitate big fat weddings, spend lots of their
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 looking for perfect caterers along with event planners so that nothing goes amiss. Had they spent
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 together, they would have had the chance to know one another which could have helped them in the
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 life. In conclusion, despite big weddings make people feel socially prestigious, it does not outweigh the negative impacts that it causes on
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 husbands and wives. The money and
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 spent could have been made more fruitful and rewarding in the
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