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Write a letter expressing your interest in a job in a different country. Write to a job recruiter. Your letter should include: •Why you want to work abroad •What type of job you want to have •Questions about working abroad

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Dear Sir or Madam. I hope you are doing well. I am writing to express my interest in a job opportunity abroad as a Medical Administrative Assistant. I would like to experience new cultures and traditions, which may not only help me to set my skills but
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 develop me personally. I am eager to work in a different country or
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, we can say, in a diverse style of workspace. Working in Canada can allow me to gain some knowledge about the cultures, ways of thinking and talking, and team collaboration and get to know more about the health sector of different cities of the world. I would probably apply for the position of
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Medical Administrative Assistant as I have 3 years of experience in
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 field, and I want to enhance my skills and knowledge about the procedures followed in foreign countries. I have experience in scheduling patients, managing medical records, and insurance processing. My organizational skills make me able to apply for
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 position.
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, I am wondering about the process of applying for a foreign job position,
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 as the necessary documents, work permit requirements, and any certifications that I need.
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, I would deeply appreciate your advice on
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 hiring process and the expected salary range. If you require any
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 information, feel free to contact me. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Rupinder Kaur.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples of how you have enhanced your skills in your previous roles. This could strengthen your application.
coherence and cohesion
Try to create a clearer separation between your motivations for working abroad and the specifics of the job you are seeking. This will help the reader follow your argument more smoothly.
task achievement
Your letter maintains a polite and respectful tone, which is very appropriate for a job application.
coherence and cohesion
You have structured your letter logically, addressing your interest, qualifications, and questions in a coherent manner.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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