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Marketing and promotion is the key to a successful business. To what extent do you agree?

#promotion #business
There is an opinion that
maketing
the exchange of goods for an agreed sum of money
marketing
 and special offer is a strategy which could help in successfully operating a
business
. In my opinion, I completely affirm
this
 viewpoint because it would help create awareness and
also
 help in boosting sales of products. There are several reasons for using
this
plural of "this"
these
 strategies to achieve
successin
Suggestion
success in
business
.
Firstly
, every
product
 needs to be advertised to the consumers even though it might require planning and resources.
This
 means that communication
channels
Suggestion
channel
 which would be used to reach out to the public need to be created or financed. To illustrate, a
business
 owner
need
Suggestion
needs
 to create
face book
Suggestion
facebook
 official page or pay for a TV advert in
other
(often plural) a command given by a superior (e.g., a military or law enforcement officer) that must be obeyed
order
 to inform people about his products or
sevices
performance of duties or provision of space and equipment helpful to others
services
.
Consequently
, it would lead
to not only sales
Suggestion
not only sales
 of goods, but
also
 referrals to people who do not know
such
 goods exist, thereby increasing the
companies
Suggestion
company's
company
 productivity.
Therefore
, marketing
ans
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 promotion is important to every
business
.
In addition
, there is
increase
Suggestion
an increase
 in the profit margin of the organization.
In other words
, promotional offers helps to boost
returns
Suggestion
returns, although
although
 it could
also
 be incur some expenses for the consumers as some people might purchase what they do not need since discounts are attached
on
Suggestion
to
with
 the
product
. Apart from
this
, it helps to increase the popularity of a
product
 which could expand the
business
.
For example
, a
product
 originally manufactured and sold in one state
such
 as Abuja, might become popular in Lagos and Rivers State,
thus
 leading to expansion of the
business
 and they try to meet the demands of the people. Clearly,
this
 a route to a successful
business
. In conclusion, I completely agree that marketing and promotional offers are a major way to make a
business
 successful as it could help to expand and yield for profit for the
business
Accept comma addition
business, although
although
 certain measures,
such
 as paying for adverts, need to done to the appropriate people who will do the publicity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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