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the education system is only critical factor in the development of a country. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#education #system #factor #development #country
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It is true that
education
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 plays a vital role in the progress of a
country
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.
Education
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 propel the
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 to drive towards a progress, while some people think that that, other factors are
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 equally responsible for the prosperity of the
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. I disagree with
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 statement. In the following paragraphs, there are some reasons that will support my opinion.
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 with, Educational Institutes produce professionals that may contribute to the betterment of a
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's economy.
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, in some countries, from a plumber to a nuclear scientist one cannot work as a professional unless one undergoes the required training and obtains the compulsory certificate, degree or diploma from the concerned academic institution.
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 practice makes GDP strong of a particular
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, because educators and economists work together and form beneficial economic policies.
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, a proper
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 system promotes high moral values, which becomes a reason of development of the
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. Adding to
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, educated people are more aware of their rights and responsibilities and
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 thing is necessary for the progression of the
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.
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,
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also
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 helps to eradicate corruption, it makes people aware that good governance is their right and they will not to pay bribes for getting things done. Educated people tend to be healthier, because they know that which is good or bad for their health.
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, an employer wants
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to educate
 employees in their offices, so
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 is the primary requirement to become a successful person. In conclusion,
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 there may be a number of factors that affect
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's well-being, but in my opinion, the
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 system is the cornerstone of economic and social progress.

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