You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do about it.

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to inform you that I lost my
suitcase
when I travelled to Paris, It was
last
week when our aeroplane landed at an international airport in Paris That time we understood that our plane had had some problem that was why we went out
from
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aeroplane
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the aeroplane
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without registration. Two hours later I realized that my
suitcase
was lost. I asked the administration to call a representative of your airline to inform him about the issue concerning my
suitcase
I would like to describe my
suitcase
it was made of black leather and on its was red vertical lines. The size of my bag was not very large its width was 20 sm and
length
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its length
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was 30 sm. Its brand was Tomy. I am looking forward to hearing the information about my bag, If you have any news about my item I consider it is usual to refund money via insurance when I bought my
suitcase
, IT was just 250 $. Yours faithfully Zohrab
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Task Achievement
For better task achievement, ensure you address all aspects of the prompt comprehensively. In this letter, you successfully described your luggage and asked about next steps. Consider clearly stating your expectations or questions to the airline for a more direct and complete response.
Coherence
Improve coherence by logically organizing ideas. Your letter has a reasonable structure, but transitions between paragraphs could be smoother. Using linking words such as "Furthermore," "Additionally," or "Consequently" can enhance flow between ideas.
Cohesion
To boost cohesion, aim for a single main idea per paragraph. You did well grouping related information together. Enhance clarity by devoting separate paragraphs to different aspects (e.g., one for the suitcase description, another for actions taken, and a final one for your expectations).

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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