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Robotics is necessary for future human development.But it has both advantages and disadvantages.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#robotics #future #development
Planting trees in cities are essential because a recent study showed that there is a positive correlation between violence and poor housing conditions. Apart from
this
, another point is to consider here is that trees are necessary to balance the ur
aban e
relating to or concerned with a city or densely populated area
urban
c
osytem,
a system formed by the interaction of a community of organisms with their physical environment
ecosystem
especially, urban wildlife. It
also
 noticed that plants are capable of buffering sounds, which means
this
 can be effective in reduces noise pollution in a great extend. Owning a
house
 is dr
eam f
Suggestion
a dream
or many.
However
 ,
t
Accept space
,
here remains some disagreement whether renting ho
usew o
Suggestion
a house
house
the house
houses
r owning a home is far better than ot
her.I
Suggestion
the other
n my op
inbion,
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
I ,
p
Accept space
,
ersonally, believe that own
house
 has more benefit than living in a re
nteded
let for money
rented
house
. Owning a
house
 is dr
eam f
Suggestion
a dream
or many.
However
 ,
t
Accept space
,
here remains some disagreement whether renting ho
usew o
Suggestion
a house
house
the house
houses
r owning a home is far better than ot
her.I
Suggestion
the other
n my op
inbion,
a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty
opinion
I ,
p
Accept space
,
ersonally, believe that own
house
 has more benefit than living in a re
nteded
let for money
rented
house
.
First
 and foremost, it is an indispensable fact that renting a
house
 has more economical because if an
y financial d
Accept comma addition
any, financial
ifficulties arise, people ca
sn d
able to
can
own size their expenses.
Ho
use owner i
Suggestion
The house owner
s responsible for maintenance and re
pare o
restore by replacing a part or putting together what is torn or broken
repair
repairs
f the
house
 wherever they live.
Additionally
,
this
 is highly beneficial for those who want re
lcate f
Suggestion
to relocate
relocate
relocated
or work .
Accept space
.
Own
house
 is part of one’s own t life style, and you can call a place home and the monthly mortgage would be beneficial for la
ndlord.
Suggestion
landlords
the landlord
Moreover
 they can make necessary change means renovation and dedcoration according to owner’s preference,
finally
 nobody ask you to move from
this
 place as you’re the owner
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