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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.Why is this the case?What can be done about this problem?

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One of the prominent challenges of our era is the
world
 hunger. Despite the ever-growing advances in agriculture and
food
 production, some parts of the
world
 still suffer from
this
 problem.
This
 essay seeks to enlist some of the causes followed by reasonable solutions. On the one hand, while there is a plethora of reasons, some are more dominant.
First
 and foremost, the wealth distribution is unfair. We have a colossal gap between the rich people and those who are deprived, which means in spite the developments in agriculture that have led to an abundance of
food
 products, some people do not have the financial means to buy them.
Secondly
, the majority of producing
food
 is wasted. The amount of consumables that are thrown away, especially in developed countries is terrifying.
For example
, research shows in the U.S alone, 100 million tons of
food
 has been wasted in 2017.
Last
 but not least, inefficient and corrupt government officials in
third
-
world
 countries add to the magnitude of the problem. It has been acknowledged by dependable sources that many of these bureaucrats prevent the public to have access to
food
 for personal gain.
On the other hand
, the aforementioned challenge can be tackled if the right methods are used.
Firstly
, by decreasing unemployment rate and increasing wages, more people will have the capital to be able to provide
food
 for their dependents and themselves.
Secondly
, increasing sales-tax for
food
 products in richer countries ensures the
food
 waste prevention.
Lastly
, introducing legislation to stop and avert personal gains in government body is a step in the right direction. By the way of conclusion,
although
world
 hunger is a growing concern in our
world
that is
 caused by various reasons
such
 as wealth distribution,
food
 wastage, and corrupt authorities, it can be averted by reasonable solutions like increasing wages, sale-tax in developing countries and stricter law.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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