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It is said that men are more privileged than women in their work places and in transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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There is an opinion that men enjoy a lot of opportunities more than women where they
work
 and
on
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in
 transit.
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
viewpoint in as
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viewpoint as
 much as they are seen as a weaker sex and
also
, since pregnancy is concerned. Even though feminine gender are not as strong as the male folks, they enjoy greater privileges because they are more proactive in their
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 whenever they are given a little opportunity to prove their
work
.
This
 means that, they are considered
first
 whenever an opportunity arises in a workplace. Even in
transport system
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the transport system
transport systems
, people pity them more since they feel they are under pressure more than men. To illustrate, when there is a rush while commuting to
work
, it is common for a charitable driver to stop over to commute women than men. Clearly, women
benefits
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benefit
 more than men. Another reason is during the nine months of pregnancy.
In other words
, due to the
humane
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human
 nature of employees and drivers, they have pity on the extra human which they carry in their stomach for long and remunerate
then
objective case of they
them
 even when they are not working after delivery. In the workplace,
for example
, despite the fact that men stay back to
work
 when a woman is on maternity leave, for the fact she gave birth, she would be paid for the period she is on maternity until she resumes
work
. In
fact women
Accept comma addition
fact, women
 benefits more than men. In conclusion,
although
 men
work
 harder than women, I completely refute the idea that they enjoy more benefits than women either as an employee or when commuting to a place.
Besides
 that, seeing female gender as
weaker sex
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the weaker sex
 and the period of pregnancy brings sympathy resulting to more favours compared to men.
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