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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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Nowadays companies are ready to do anything to encourage people to buy their products or
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 their services.
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, I would argue that some of
adverts
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the adverts
 and the way they are represented are inappropriate and have negative effects on
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.
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, one argument that can be put forward against some advertising methods, is their strategy
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of
for
 targeting children.
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, some adverts aim younger generations in order to indirectly force their parents but their products. When,
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, companies
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 children's
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 characters in an advertisement, they know that
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 way
draw
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draws
 youngster's attention and they become fond of
advert
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the advert
; now they pester their parents to purchase what was being advertised, even if they do not need that at all. Another way of tempting children is using a catchy song and child actors in the advertisements. Children easily attract to a simple and rhythmic song and remember it. In
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cases
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cases, then
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 advertisement could be unethical because they exploit honest and immature mind of children.
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, sometimes companies benefit from what is popular
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 the
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 to entice
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the public
 toward their products. We can see lots of commercials every day on TV or billboards in the street with
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the appearance
 of a famous athlete or celebrity.
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 advert usually just want to persuade
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 to
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 their brand, telling them that their products are being used by prominent individuals.
Besides
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 from not being informative, these kind of ads
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promotes
 artificial wants in people; people, as a consequence, are enticed to buy their products to enhance their self-image, even there is not any necessity in buying them. These
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types
 of advertising
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 could be seen as fraudulent that manipulates people's mind. In conclusion,
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 there are advertisements which are very informative and honest about their products, there are some that just want to persuade and wrongly convince
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 to buy and
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 their products and services, so I surely see them as unethical and unacceptable.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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