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Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activity that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It's important to have enough free
time
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, to develop the social
life
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, take a break from the work or from the study and, maybe, to develop new skills and to maintain the
mind
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 active. Some people prefer to simply rest, others are more active during their leisure
time
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. In my opinion,
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 there are some benefits of relaxing activities, is far better to improve the
mind
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 rather than simply doing nothing, because it can boost the overall quality of
life
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, reducing the stress. The typical workplace is an extremely fast-paced place, where the employees are constantly under pressure: usually they have to deal with strict deadlines, impolite bosses or colleagues and poor salaries.
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 lifestyle is undoubtedly unhealthy, both for the body and the
mind
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, so it's perfectly fine to take a break from
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life
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, slow down the rhythm and simply enjoy the our empty moments.
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, others believe that to not use well our free
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 is a waste of
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.
Time
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 is too precious to be wasted, and we should use it for activities that can elevate us in some way,
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 as reading, playing chess, or practice sports.
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 is an active way to spend the leisure, in which people not only relax, but actively learn something new and develop new skills. To conclude, I strongly support the active way to spend the free
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 because, if people can maintain active their
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,
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 gain them a long
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 sense of self improvement. If people learn something and they are active, surely they will be less stressed even during the work
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, because they will have the sense to obtain
somenthing
an unspecified thing, agency, amount, etc.
something
 from their free
time
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.

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