Traffic and housing problems could be solved by moving large companies, factories and their employees to the countryside. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion that

relocating

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relocates

is relocating

large

scales

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scale

businesses

such

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as companies, industrial organizations and the people working for them

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the rural area could help reduce

traffic

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congestion and accommodation issues.

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, I disagree with

this

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viewpoint because as much as people still commute to

work

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on a daily basis and the number of vehicles that apply on the

road

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does not reduce,

traffic

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and housing challenges will not be resolved.

To begin

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with,

although

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movies factories would create more space to build more houses for people to live, commuting daily to the rural area where they

work

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still results to

traffic

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in peak hours.

This

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means that employees who

work

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in these remote areas would

had

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have

to face the hassle of being stuck on their way to

work

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. In Anambra State,

for example

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, people live in Onitsha while they

work

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in Umuchu factories. Despite these

factory

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factories

inside

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a village, there is still house shortages in town and

also

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traffic

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congestions every morning and evening which

causes

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cause

stress to the employee. Clearly, relocating the industries did not solve

traffic

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and

accomodation

making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances

accommodation

issues.

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, provided the people

continues

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continue

are continuing

buying cars to help them transport conveniently,

traffic

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congestions will not reduce.

In other words

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, the

road

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will not contain the same volume of cars in

transit which

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transit, which

initially

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contains even if companies are relocated. To illustrate,

survey

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the survey

shows that there is an increase in sales of automobiles and car owners confirmed that the primary aim of buying cars is to ease stress especially while going to

work

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Consequently

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, increasing the

traffic

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on the

road

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despite relocating large scale businesses. In conclusion, I

strong

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strongly

refute the idea that moving companies and industries to

romote

located far away spatially

remote

promote

areas would reduce

traffic

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and housing shortages. Provided people have to go to

work

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on a daily basis and the number of

vehicle

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vehicles

on the

road

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is on the increase

Accept space

then

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there will be

traffic

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and house shortages.

Therefore

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that is

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not the solution to the problem.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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traffic congestion
housing problems
countryside
large companies
factories
employees
urban areas
land availability
relocate
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challenges
infrastructure
transportation
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Robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. Why is this happening? Do you think this wil have a positive or negative impact on society?

Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is helpful for students, it has many negative effects, and its use for educational purposes should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?