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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?

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Online shopping has become increasingly popular these days and more and more people prefer to shop / buy online
instead
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 of going to stores.
This
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 trend has both positive and negative impact on individuals and companies. The growing popularity of online shopping can be attributed to the fact that it makes shopping easier. From an individual perspective, buying from online stores can be convenient and time saving.
This
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 means that customers can place orders from their home through shopping websites or apps without
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to brick-and-mortar stores and
thus
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 save both time and money.
In addition
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 to that, consumers can get products with better quality and at lower prices by comparing the same item
on
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in
 various online shops. As for online store owners, The main advantage of having an online
business
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 is the cost difference between setting up a traditional office-based company and an
ecommerce
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eCommerce
 website. While there are fees associated with securing a domain and setting up a website, these are minimal in comparison to the cost of leasing and maintaining physical premises.
Online
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The online business model
business
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 model
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 enables the owners to market their companies on a global scale, reaching potential customers in other countries and continents. On the flip side, there are security concerns associated with online shopping. Individuals may suffer from
financial loss
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a financial loss
financial losses
 because computer viruses and hackers are constantly trying to tap into online companies and steal customer identities and financial information.
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, the lack of a support system can make the process of exchange or refund complicated.
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, if a customer finds that the purchased goods are faulty, it may take several days until the issue is rectified. For online shoppers, they have to deal with the complaints from the customers due to the faulty goods. And
this
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 can affect the credibility of the online stores and eventually influence their
business
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. To conclude, online shopping has definitely made people’s life easier by providing them more choices at lower prices and
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 by offering more people the opportunity to start their own
business
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 online. At the same time, network security and poor quality of online products
also
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 bring inconveniences to both individuals and companies.

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