In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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Nowadays, people are interested in
build ing
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
their home in big cities that can help them to get everything what they want easier. But in the past
,
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they didn’t. Why older generation prefer living in
small community
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a small community
small communities
the small community
? As a coin has two sides, living in small villages has both advantages and disadvantages. There were a number of the great things to live in a little
village
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Firstly
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, people who living in
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area knew their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
very well so that no one felt lonely.
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, children grew up being polite and respectful because they lived in a bare living condition where their parent did not overindulged.They
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played safely in the street and there was little crime.
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, everyone could enjoy fresh air without
being worry
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worried
worries
worrying
are worried
is worried
about pollution that could easily make them ill. Not only did they have better
enviroment but
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environment, but
environment but
they
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got natural food. It caused people in
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village
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a village
villages
the village
like to eat
natural meal
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a natural meal
natural meals
more than fast food with much of
chemist
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chemistry
ingredients inside like urban people.It was a simple life, but everyone was happy.
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, the
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view shows the downside that life in
small
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a small village
the small village
village
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is not flexible to live.The advancement in small
village
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was limited because they have not ability to access or even build some develop constructions or have
variety
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varied
choices to get good jobs
.
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They could not get a good formal education because almost people had to work in farm or field. To give a clear example
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education were only up to primary level and they had to find
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education in big cities.
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, the small villages did not have a hospital,
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it was very difficult when someone was ill.Base
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on
my experience, the biggest negative side was that The societies in the
village
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would not receive the latest technology
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This
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made the inhabitants who lived in the villages could not follow the development of technology as well as the people in the cities. In conclusion, I think older generations were more pleased with living in a small
village
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, nowadays, there are more and more advantages to living in a large city and I think it is better for developing our life.Where possible, local governments should pay particular attention to improve small villages.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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