Space travel has made Sometimes and people think that Space tourism will be probably developed in future? Do you think Space to travel would be a positive or negative development?

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with
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Space
travel will soon become the reality of life.
people
will soon
able
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be able
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to see outer
space
more
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closer
from
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to
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the
Space
shuttle.
However
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I was always interested in
Space
exploration. If I
would have
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the opportunity to go into
the
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apply
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outer
space
I would definitely like to try
on
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it on
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. I think it is very interesting & challenging to go
in to
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the Spaceship and
gathering
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gather
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different
kind
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kinds
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of information
species
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& probes. Many individual
people
think
this
kind of experiment is a waste of time & money.
Nevertheless
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humankind
are
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always making one step forward towards
Space
communications. we need to know what is beyond our solar system. we need to know what is beyond our Universe.
To sum
up
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up,
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even
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apply
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Tourism will
also
become one of the top
most destination
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destinations
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in the world and it will
also
help
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the Country
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Country
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economies
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economy
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. Another important
aspects
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of
Space
is that
Scientist
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Scientists
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are always about to make new discoveries there. I think it is a great feeling to give
people
more Opportunities, Knowledge and Experience.
Scientist
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Scientists
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often
study
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studies
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new
Constulation
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Constellation
, when they launch the satellite from land and monitor them. When I was
child
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a child
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I collected
lot
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a lot
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of Stamps and postal
card
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cards
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with Spaceship
picture
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pictures
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. I dreamed that someday I be able to make a flight and see
the
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apply
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outer
space
in reality. Today my plans
has
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have
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changed but my
dreams
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dream
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to go into
the
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apply
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space
still remains
same
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and it will not
vanished
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. I believe in a few
years
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year's
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time
people
will
able
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be able
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to go to
Space
just like they go to
museum
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museums
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.
To sum up
, I think
Space
will give more self-realization
and
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apply
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more opportunities' to grow and more
goal
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goals
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to achieve.
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