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show the changes of the number of visitors in three main major airports in New York city from 1995 to 2000

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The given chart i
llustrate
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illustrates
the quantity of visitors using three main a
iports
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airports
ports
in New y
ork
the English royal house (a branch of the Plantagenet line) that reigned from 1461 to 1485; its emblem was a white rose
York
city from 1995 to 2000. Overall
,i
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,
t can be seen that the number of passengers visited John F.Kennedy changed fluctuate over the six
year
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eriod whereas
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period, whereas
the two other airports witnessed an upward trend In 1995
,
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,
the quantity of travellers visited at John F.Kennedy a
iport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
part
s
trarted
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
started
stated
at around 28 millions and
then
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 suddenly increased to 48 million in the
next
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 3 years
.
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.
In the
year
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 1999
,
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,
the figure d
roppoed
let fall to the ground
dropped
to approximately 32 millions and rose dramatically to 44 m
illions
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million
in the
last
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year
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 of the period
.
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.
The data of LaGuardia airport increased steadily and reached the highest point at 68 m
illions
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million
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,
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,
the number of visitors at Newark airport started at the lowest p
oin
a geometric element that has position but no extension
point
at 17 m
illions
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million
in the
first
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year
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.
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.
After that , the figure increased significantly to 41 millions in 1998 the data remain stable at 41 millions in the
last
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 2 years
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