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The bar graph below illustrates the use of tobacco products by students of secondary school in the United states?

The bar graph below illustrates the use of tobacco products by students of secondary school in the United states?
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given bar graph shows information about
consumption
Correct article usage
the consumption
show examples
 of tobacco and
middle
Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
 students in the United State of reference of High
School
Use synonyms
 consumer product as
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
show examples
middle
Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
 given bar graph shows information about
consumption
Correct article usage
the consumption
show examples
 of tobacco and
middle
Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
 students in the United State of reference of High
School
Use synonyms
 consumer product as
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
show examples
middle
Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
 given bar graph shows information about
consumption
Correct article usage
the consumption
show examples
 of tobacco and
middle
Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
 students in the United State of reference of High
School
Use synonyms
 consumer product as
computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
show examples
middle
Use synonyms
school
Use synonyms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add some linking words.
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words middle, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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