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summarise the changes in the number of visitors using three major airports in New York city

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The bar chart gives the figures of visitors who uses those major airports in New York in the period of 6 years from 1995 to 2000. In general
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it can be clearly s
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that John F.Kennedy and LaGuardia had an upward trend
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Except
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Newark airport p
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fluctuates
fluctuate
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 Between 1995 to 1997
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as we can see
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 airports all had an increased
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here was a s
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slight
rise in the number of passengers o
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to
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LaGuardia airport
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John F.Kennedy a
iport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
w
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change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
went
waiting
up impressively from over 25 m
illions
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million
visitors to almost 50 m
illions
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million
people.
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Newark a
irport climbed
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airport, climbed
dramatically y
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to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
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from more than 15 millions to nearly 40 millions
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it can be seen
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LaGuardia a
iport
an airfield equipped with control tower and hangars as well as accommodations for passengers and cargo
airport
had a sharply improve from about 47 millions to 69 million t
raveller
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travellers
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John F.k
ennedy
a large airport on Long Island to the east of New York City
Kennedy
decreased s
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slightly
 from 48 m
illions
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million
in 1997 to 31 m
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million
in 1999
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it continued rise to 42 m
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million
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The was no change from the number of passengers of Newark city from 1998 to 2000
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