Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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Youngsters are in stress from being qualified, from society and commercial opinions. There are several reasons

lead

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leads

to the issue and some actions can be done to address

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High social expectation

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The high social expectation

is one of the main reasons resulted in the children’s pressures. It is believed that young people holding a university degree

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are

likely to secure a job with well

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paying

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acquires social admiration and respect, which is a pride of parents. The youth,

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need to force themselves to strive for qualifications by studying harder.

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, children feel

overwhelm

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overwhelmed

to achieve the targets which they might not actually want to.

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, several in-depth conversations between parents, teachers and son and daughter should be taken to have a mutual understanding and

shared goal

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shared goals

a shared goal

, of which both sides feel satisfied and set obtainable objectives in a short

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time frame

each time.

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, if adults want children to be

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successful

and meet expected achievement, they probably need to mentor their children with different approaches and gradually provide more practical skills and advices.

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, children can be physically and mentally developed with the help from parents and school. Another reason should be considered is that nowadays, there is an enormous growing advertisements solely aiming at selling company’s products, which obviously is an adverse effect on social assumption and expectation. Many brands

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as Vina milk or Milo promoting that their products with DHA and other supplements will help children to be taller and

smatter

showing mental alertness and calculation and resourcefulness

smarter

. By spending money on these goods, community and especially parents desire a significant change of their children’s intellectual capacity, which in fact affected by many social factors.

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, accidently commercial advertisements have been putting

pressures

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pressure

on the future generation. It is clear that several reasons have caused offspring’s pressures and many solutions should be done to solve the issue.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

304 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

academic pressure
globalized world
competitive education system
social media influences
cyberbullying
commercial pressures
aggressive marketing
materialistic desires
peer pressure
high expectations
standardized testing
quantifiable performance
stress and anxiety
extracurricular achievements

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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Include an introduction and conclusion

some people believe that key to healthy life is exercise. some believe that food is the key. discuss both sides and give your opinion

Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Others think they should begin after 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people think that the government should pay for health care and education, but others believe it is not the government’s responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.