Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Youngsters are in stress from being qualified, from society and commercial opinions. There are several reasons
lead
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leads
to the issue and some actions can be done to address
this
.
High social expectation
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The high social expectation
is one of the main reasons resulted in the children’s pressures. It is believed that young people holding a university degree
is
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are
likely to secure a job with well
payment
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paying
.
This
acquires social admiration and respect, which is a pride of parents. The youth,
then
need to force themselves to strive for qualifications by studying harder.
As a result
, children feel
overwhelm
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overwhelmed
to achieve the targets which they might not actually want to.
Hence
, several in-depth conversations between parents, teachers and son and daughter should be taken to have a mutual understanding and
shared goal
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shared goals
a shared goal
, of which both sides feel satisfied and set obtainable objectives in a short
timeframe
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time frame
each time.
In addition
, if adults want children to be
success
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successful
and meet expected achievement, they probably need to mentor their children with different approaches and gradually provide more practical skills and advices.
Therefore
, children can be physically and mentally developed with the help from parents and school. Another reason should be considered is that nowadays, there is an enormous growing advertisements solely aiming at selling company’s products, which obviously is an adverse effect on social assumption and expectation. Many brands
such
as Vina milk or Milo promoting that their products with DHA and other supplements will help children to be taller and
smatter
showing mental alertness and calculation and resourcefulness
smarter
. By spending money on these goods, community and especially parents desire a significant change of their children’s intellectual capacity, which in fact affected by many social factors.
Thus
, accidently commercial advertisements have been putting
pressures
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pressure
on the future generation. It is clear that several reasons have caused offspring’s pressures and many solutions should be done to solve the issue.
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