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Some people think that studying from the past teaches us nothing about today’s life. Others argue that the history is a value source of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many people debate that the
history
 has no useful for modern life while other people believe that it is still valuable to some extents. I will discuss my point of views towards these two arguments in the essay. On the one hand, the old day information is a critical educational source. If a nation wants to educate citizens about its cultural,
history
Suggestion
historical
 and the indigenous, which had been formed for millions of years, the government needs to use historical documentaries written along the way. Because young people need to have a concrete foundation of his or her country, from which they can at least represent key features to international friends, or to preserve the
cultural
Suggestion
culture
 and to pass to the
next
 generations.
For example
, learning from the past, Vietnamese youths know how Vietnamese language was formed and used popularly
after
Suggestion
over
 a thousand years of China’s invasion.
On the other hand
, it is clear that modernization is not related and relied on the past. The world has been modernizing rapidly due to
technology
Suggestion
technological
 revolution;
therefore
, techniques from the old days were no longer used and barely existed. Even manual jobs still need updated skills and
helps
a large number or amount
heaps
 of new hi-tech tools, which will help worker to get a job more easily in
industrial company
Suggestion
an industrial company
industrial companies
. In health science,
for instance
, when researchers previously wanted to explore which factors influenced on an epidemic, they used to study the long
history
 of a community.
In contrast
, today scientists can utilize a list of questions, observations and tests to figure out what causes
diarrhea
frequent and watery bowel movements; can be a symptom of infection or food poisoning or colitis or a gastrointestinal tumor
diarrhoea
 and how to prevent the disease. In conclusion, I think, nowadays, the
history
 still plays a vital role but might not be applicable to business and technology.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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