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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society?

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It is an evident phenomenon in many countries in the world that there is a shortage of students who choose to study
science
 subjects as their major. There are some reasons to justify
this
 trend and it
also
 causes/ triggers adverse
/
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 effects
/
impacts on the
society
. The
first
 reason why fewer students choose
science
 as their major is that
science
subjects namely
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subjects, namely
 Biological Technology or Computer
Science
,… are extremely demanding. Generally, a major in
science
 consists of related subjects with a great amount of specialized knowledge and a number of experiments, which can be very tough.
As a result
/
Consequently
, students are often put under pressure a lot of pressure in order to understand and handle the tasks well. Another justification is that graduates may take risks of unemployment as there are fewer job opportunities for graduates in
science
 majors.
Instead
, students are likely to choose a major
that is
 not so
demanding but
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demanding, but
 still makes it easier for them to find a job. The deficiency in students in
science
 fields might trigger
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 effects to the
society
. The most clearly seen impact might be the imbalance between the number of students who study
science
 and other majors.
This
 may lead to the shortage of workers in scientific fields and
also
 cause a lack/ insufficiency of technical breakthroughs and inventions.
Additionally
, there may be a crisis of employment due to the disparity in the number of graduates who choose other fields
such
 as business, art or pedagogy and those who study
science
. More students majoring in
science
 may be made redundant as there are less job opportunities in
this
 area.
As a result
,
this
 will increase the burden of unemployment on the
society
. To conclude,
reasons
Suggestion
the reasons
 that cause the lack of students choosing
science
 as a major vary, and
this
 issue may bring several negative impacts on the
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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