Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult such as, Sahara desert or the Antarcatic What are benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places.
Nowadays many tourists are exploring
places
where conditions are challenging such
as the Sahara desert
and the Antarctic. In my opinion, it is good. People especially tourists can explore interesting places
like the Sahara desert
or the Antarctic. Meanwhile, there can be some disadvantages, those places
are dangerous and those trips can cost you your life.
As I said, exploring places
is great, especially if you are visiting those lands that have difficult conditions. It brings you a new feeling. And the most important thing, you will be brave and ready for other hard situations. Visiting such
places
, allows you to have a wonderful experience. This
kind of trip can help you change the way you think, and improve yourself morally. Those changes will make you happy and your life more interesting. For example
, according to
scientists at Oxford University people who explore extreme places
are happier and braver 51% than those who are not visiting dangerous places
.
But despite all these facts, spending your time in such
perilous places
can be unsafe, and this
trip can cost you your life. The Sahara desert
has a hard climate and in the desert
can be dangers from extreme heat, sunburn, hypothermia from cold nights, and sand storms. Tourists who have weak health can die. Antarctica can be a very dangerous place. There can be problems with living and working in Antarctica including hypothermia, snow blindness, altitude sickness, and skiing accidents. For instance
, there are 1000 deaths in Antarctica according to
the Geographical Nations website. But I think, if you bring a professional guide with you there will not be any accidents.
To sum up
, of course, there are advantages like having new emotions and the opportunity to see the world. There are also
disadvantages such
as bad effects on your health. But I can say that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, so I recommend you to visit that kind of place with confidence.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
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- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...