The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates how
children
travelled to school using different means of
transport
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the transport
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system in the years 1990 and 2010.
Overall
, most of the
children
preferred walking
while
going to school in 1990,
while
most of the students used cars
at the end
of the period. Walking, Cycling and using a school
bus
the
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are the
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major modes of transportation for earlier
children
.
In contrast
, travelling by car had become more common for 2010
children
. Walking is the primary source of transportation among students in 1990 with more
that
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than
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10
million
trips
during the year.
Nonetheless
, it contributed to only 6
million
trips
in 2010.
Bus
rides,
cycling
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and cycling
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contributed almost
similarly
in 1990 with around 7
million
trips
. A mix of Walking and taking a
bus
ride accounted for just under 6
million
trips
in 1990. Car
trips
increased by around 7
million
in 2010.
In contrast
, walking
trips
and a mix of walking and taking a
bus
ride have reduced to half of their original value by the end of the period. Cycling
trips
saw a drastic decline
by
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of
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three times
between
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over
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the years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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