The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates how
children
travelled to school using different means of Use synonyms
transport
system in the years 1990 and 2010.
Add an article
the transport
Overall
, most of the Linking Words
children
preferred walking Use synonyms
while
going to school in 1990, Linking Words
while
most of the students used cars Linking Words
at the end
of the period. Walking, Cycling and using a school Linking Words
bus
Use synonyms
the
major modes of transportation for earlier Add a missing verb
are the
children
. Use synonyms
In contrast
, travelling by car had become more common for 2010 Linking Words
children
.
Walking is the primary source of transportation among students in 1990 with more Use synonyms
that
10 Correct word choice
than
million
Use synonyms
trips
during the year. Use synonyms
Nonetheless
, it contributed to only 6 Linking Words
million
Use synonyms
trips
in 2010. Use synonyms
Bus
rides, Use synonyms
cycling
contributed almost Correct word choice
and cycling
similarly
in 1990 with around 7 Linking Words
million
Use synonyms
trips
. A mix of Walking and taking a Use synonyms
bus
ride accounted for just under 6 Use synonyms
million
Use synonyms
trips
in 1990.
Car Use synonyms
trips
increased by around 7 Use synonyms
million
in 2010. Use synonyms
In contrast
, walking Linking Words
trips
and a mix of walking and taking a Use synonyms
bus
ride have reduced to half of their original value by the end of the period. Cycling Use synonyms
trips
saw a drastic decline Use synonyms
by
three times Change preposition
of
between
the years.Change preposition
over
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