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An enjoyable job is far better than a high-salary or boring job, do you agree or disagree? What do you think is important?

#job #high-salary
It is the fact that the best choice of
work
 with people like fields rather than the gain more wages or a dislike sector. While I acknowledge that we have been working with selected jobs which we want,
however
, I do not believe that a high salary gives ecstatic. On the one hand, those who think that joyful
work
 is better because people can be doing a job with interested and easily finished the
work
.
Subsequently
, people would be well-being and without stress spend time with family and alive.
Also
, sometimes, they can innovate new ideas and it is benefits for the company and for them.
As a result
, they can
work
 for the organization and them as well. In short, selected designation always be a perfect choice for people.
On the other hand
, there are diverse drawbacks by people
work
 for merely high paid and other fields.
Firstly
, people can get more money, but they cannot be happy in their life because they are mostly busy to
work
 and without a mood, they have to do it. So, they always under stress and
also
 they cannot spend time with family and friends.
Secondly
, they can be thought about
work
 and their job,
then
 they mentally disturb and suffering from high illness.
Thus
, people
work
 without like they can feel exhausted and stressful. To conclude, due to, people do conveniently
work
 than more salary
work
 or without interest. I consider that people have to
work
 which is they like and comfortable, it is best to do the
work
 and stay happily alive.

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