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Essay topics: Students in school and university learn far more by lessons with their teachers compared to other sources(example: television and internet). Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the adolescents acquire more subject knowledge from their instructor than from computer and other devices.I strongly disagree with
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 services render them more detailed information than the teachers.
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I believe that the
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 has an enormous amount of data which can be retrieved with the tap of a button
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 is to say that the learners get more than what they ask for and
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 refer many websites to compare and avail the reliable resources which could not be expected from the mentors
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as they only teach what is printed in the textbooks.To illustrate
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The Times has recently reported that the students who use the
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 as the source of the material have secured higher grades
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 the pupils who followed the instructors .
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the students would be easily distracted
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 especially post-lunch and there are high chances that they miss the lecture as these are not recorded
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 demonstrates that the external sources
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 as Tv and
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 play a pivotal role in education.
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I
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 reckon that teachers are not the reliable sources.
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most of them are with no prior experience and just join soon after their college as the recruiting team is too lenient these days
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the report from Sunday Times found that nearly 86% of the institutions recruit freshers
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in order
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cut off
 their expenses on salaries.
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 is because the experienced
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staffs, must
 be paid with huge sum of money.
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 illustrates that the information given by the teachers cannot be trusted
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de ,I strongly believe that the learners must rely
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the internet
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 and media rather on the teachers because various
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able materials from different experts
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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