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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Some people believe that living in a horizontal
city
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 is the best, while the opponents of
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. While there are benefits to residents who dwell in a
city
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 which consists of low-rise construction, I would argue that cities with skyscrapers and high-rise buildings offer more advantages. On the one hand, it is beneficial for residents to live in a horizontal
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 based on a few financial and security reasons.
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, people have to pay less for building services. If residents settle in a private house, they may save a great deal of money since they won’t have to pay for building services.
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,
living
the act of departing
leaving
 lower to the ground is safer for inhabitants when emergencies occur.
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, if a fire starts in the home, they can quickly escape from the dangerous areas because the building is not too high off the ground and it won’t take much time to leave.
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, it seems to me that living in a vertical
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 is the best choice. A
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 with skyscrapers will have more space for public usage because there will be less land used for residential areas due to the amount of people who can live in high buildings.
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, the government would be able to use
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 land to build hospitals, schools or places for entertainment.
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, it is much more convenient for residents to live in an apartment in a tall building which offers a wide range of goods and services, thanks to shopping malls and service
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
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 on lower floors. In conclusion, while living in a horizontal
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 does have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of life in a
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 with skyscrapers
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make
 living in a vertical
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 the better choice.
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