Your company has recently introduced a new work uniform. You are mostly happy with the uniform, but there is one thing that you do not like. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter say what you like about the uniform explain what you don’t you like about the uniform suggest how the uniform can be improved

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Dear Mr. Pink, I am writing

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letter to express that my latest uniform is very elegant and I love it because it is in my favourite colour red, which looks amazing.

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, the shirt has a black bow which gives a professional touch and it fits

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me.

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, sorry to say that there is only one thing about the dress that I dislike, the fabric of

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outfit is too hard, which can cause skin rashes and

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avoid wearing

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clothes as we work in hot regions. So

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is suitable only in Winter. I want to give you a suggestion that you can change

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fabric with cotton, as cotton is very comfortable to wear and

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it is softer than others. I'd be thankful for your compromise. Thanks in advance,

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Coherence and Cohesion

Consider using connectors between ideas, especially when expressing contrasting points (e.g. "However").

Task Achievement

Try to provide a more specific suggestion or rationale for changing the fabric. For instance, mention any specific benefits other than comfort.

Task Achievement

The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout, suitable for a formal communication with a manager.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter is structured in a logical manner, consistently focusing on one aspect of the uniform in each paragraph.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

135 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

introduced
appreciation
pleasing
professional image
elegant
sophistication
professionalism
high quality
appearance
comfort
modern
stylish
tailored
sleek lines
polished
discomfort
relaxed
adjustable
beneficial
aesthetics
commitment
valued
enhance
modifications
impression

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