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It is important that we maintain and protect the beautiful building of the past, even if it is expensive for countries to do so. Do you agree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There have been discussions recently whether the government should use large sums of money to maintain old buildings of the past. Many people claim that
this
 is an important task and the expenses shouldn’t matter. In
this
 essay, I will give you my opinion and why I agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, it costs a tremendous amount of resources to maintain ancient and old buildings. Even though, it might seem economically inefficient to invest in the restoration and maintenance of these historical buildings, they have a lot of value for the culture.
For instance
, the Greeks are proud of their culture and they have a great interest in showing it through the historical buildings like the Acropolis. These ancient structures give the people of Greece a common identity and a feeling of fellowship.
Furthermore
, surveys have shown that countries that have maintained many buildings of historical value
also
 have a better understanding of their ancestry, which can be a great attribute in the perseverance of their culture.
Additionally
, keeping historical buildings intact can give huge boosts in tourism. Culture and history are two of the most important factors for tourists to choose their destination.
For example
, when Japan opened for foreign visitors to come in and see the temples from the Edo era, tourists swarmed into the country.
Thus
, there can be economic advantages in using money to protect old buildings of the past. In conclusion, I believe that the maintenance of historical buildings is important for cultural and historical identity, as well as it can have positive effects on the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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