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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. To what extent do you agree..

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
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Historically, benchmarking has been used to proceed with
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performance testing,
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 only recently the
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 availability has gained recognition and respect because of high-availability technologies
moreover
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systems
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 are expected to operate continually (24/7). Not only is downtime unacceptable, but its cost can be enormous, as noted in [3],
system
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 downtime can exceed $500 0000 per hour, stressing the importance of a highly available
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. Increasingly, individuals and organizations are developing or procuring
sophis- ticated
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 computing and communication
systems
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 for which the high
availabilty
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availability
is a requisite whether to service a set of cash dispensers, control a
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 constellation, an
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, a nuclear plant, telecom
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, emergency telecommunications or a radiation therapy device
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 or to maintain the
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 of a sensitive database. The consequences are serious if even parts of
such
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systems
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 are unavailable when their services are needed. Each type of
system
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 has different availability requirements, depending on their
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, on-board avionic computer
systems
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 have entirely different standards than an engineering simulation
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 or even a network storage
system
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. we could provide an example
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traditional RAID (redundant array of independent disks) setup on a commodity
system
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. The
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 of that
system
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 would be quite distinguishable from that of a dedicated NAS (network addressed storage)
system
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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