An increasing number of advertisements on TV aim at children. What are the effects of television advertising? Should television advertising be controlled?

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Advertisements are usually aimed at informing us about a product or service.
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, many advertisements use attractive items to influence the tender minds of children.
This
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adversely affects their mindset not only by increasing unnecessary
desires but
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desires, but
also
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by diverting their attention from education and sports. Advertisements on television and various social media flash new products that aim at making children commercial consumers.
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, many children demand new and costly branded dresses,
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
Jewelry
, and smart-phones.
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often leads to unnecessary demands and diverts their attention from productive activities
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as sports. In several cases, children tend to focus more on the advertised products rather than on education.
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compromises their career and prospects of a future success.
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, a recent study by the Ministry of Culture and the Human Resource Department of India revealed that the cognitive ability of children these days
has fallen
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have fallen
by 20 percent as compared to the previous generation due to increase in consumerism. Advertisements aimed at targeting children must be regulated since children
can not
can not
cannot
make informed and objective decisions. The Censor Board of India,
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, studies all television media, including advertisements, to judge their suitability for various audiences. It
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studies advertisements to suit the requirements of children.
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regulation protects the rights of children from the onslaught of consumerism. In conclusion, protecting children from commercial advertisements that create unnecessary demands not only helps children become more successful in the
future but
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future, but
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prevents unnecessary expenses which makes them economically stable.
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