Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
high technology era,
television
as one of sophisticated technology can provide all information and knowledge that we need. People, especially children, are able to catch new knowledge without touching a lot of books and doing something else everywhere that provides
television
. I totally support
this
statement and bring my own reasons.
First
of all,
television
has many beneficial programs,
such
as BBC and School TV, for children. So, when children do not have any activities, they must be better to watch
television
than go somewhere and do something useless.
For example
, half of Indonesian children prefer to stay at home and watch
television
after they get their selves at home because few
television
programs have useful programs, like Laptop Si Unyil and Dunia Binatang. When children are staying at home and watching a helpful
television
program, they are not wasting their time for nothing.
Then
, every year, all of technologies develop to be better than before.
Therefore
, the children will be encouraged to increase their knowledge in order to use their
television
perfectly because they will not be able to utilize their televisions if they do not understand how to use it. In illustration, 2 decades ago, people did something hardly when they wanted to change a channel
of
Suggestion
on
television
, but now we can change the channel by a controller.
On the other hand
, most of
television
programs show many useless programs that are not allowed to be watched by children. For illustration, sometimes we find an appearance which is vulgar and is only intended for adults.
Also
, the brightness of
television
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the television
is not pretty good for children’s eyes, and most of children do not understand how to set it up. So, children will get damage to their eyes when they spend their time too long in front of
television
. All
of
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in
all, there are many advantages and disadvantages
from
Suggestion
of
television
. Parents only need to pay more
attentions
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attention
for their children whatever the children do.
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